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Lips closed in silence by LauraCallsen Lips closed in silence by LauraCallsen
words just don't come out
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Critique by Vic-P-Photography Dec 5, 2012, 1:16:52 PM
I have always been a great believer in a portraits ability to work as well if not more successfully when the general rule of showing eyes and ensuring they are in focus is more or less thrown out the window. We rely so often on judging the emotion in someone's eyes that when we are forced to find those feelings through more subtle means it makes the whole thing significantly more poignant. This is where this photo succeeds so thoroughly, creating a piece full of feeling and meaning with the delicate balance of a hand and the minute positional changes lips make when feeling one way or another.

I think there will always be myriad ways to interpret the emotions in a shot like this, we all after all show emotions in different ways and unless the look is one of pantomime cliche the predictions will always be somewhat subjective. For me here I see restraint barely made, frustration in the solid poise of the lips and in the the loose curl of the hand a balance between saying more and staying silent, unsure of the best course of action. I guess what really matters though is that such a depth of emotion can be garnered and in making that connection with the viewer the shot once again succeeds admirably.

Such images do however need some detail to allow the eye to roam, again eyes are such a natural focal point that without them the eye needs something else to head towards. With just enough focus on the freckles this photo gains that and at the same time keeps your vision at the facial features where the story is being told.

Technically the shot is strong but offers my only areas for tweaks I think. The composition is fairly traditional, certainly nothing wronged such but I think it would benefit from a slightly bolder crop, letter boxing it slightly into a 16:9 type ratio. The vignette also leaves a slightly distracting darkness to the top right corner. The balance in the mono conversion is great though, not too contrasty and so holding onto a nice retro feel.

These are minor notes though on a thoroughly wonderful photograph, capturing a great amount of emotion in a subtle and moving way.
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LuxAeterna-LuSoscia Featured By Owner Aug 26, 2013   General Artist
kidnaps me
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LuxAeterna-LuSoscia Featured By Owner Aug 26, 2013   General Artist
*it kidnaps me
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jonesblachowicz Featured By Owner Jul 9, 2013  Student Photographer
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chriseastmids Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
what a beautiful image, everything about is just wonderful
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:iconmrkabkard:
Mrkabkard Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2013   Photographer
this photo is beautiful, there is so much emotion and i love the shallow depth of field!
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ModyZinc Featured By Owner Apr 20, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
I love it, Well done. :)
Featured in my journal [link]
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Shenandoah-Daughter Featured By Owner Mar 30, 2013
I love the mood with his one.
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lollipops708 Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2013  Student Photographer
I featured your beautiful picture in my latest journal entry, please feel free to check it out! [link]
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Loucos Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
It's a very delicate and feminine potrait. I love it ! Bravo !
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alexhascoolpictures Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2013  Student Photographer
This is awesome.
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bmilky Featured By Owner Feb 4, 2013
so soft,
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Chickwcam Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
Gorgeous! I love the mood. and I love that you chose to make it black and white. :)
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nikifrank Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2013  Professional Photographer
I really like it! so soft and i love the lighting and her gesture
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S-a-n-c-h-e-z Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2013  Student General Artist
Featured: [link]
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:iconlauracallsen:
LauraCallsen Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
aww thank you so much :heart:
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c4-r Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
LOVE THE FRECKLES :wow: :heart
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KarelSopek Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
Great portrait, I like it a lot :clap:
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LauraCallsen Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
I'm very glad you do :iconbigheartplz:
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GoralPaulina Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
Great and delicate...
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LauraCallsen Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
I'm glad you like it =) thanks a lot
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Saffella Featured By Owner Dec 12, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Hi, I have a question. Can I paint this photo? I really like it and I want to pain it digitally (I just get tablet and I want to try myself) :)
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LauraCallsen Featured By Owner Dec 12, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
Of course you can =) can you contact me, when it's finished ? :heart:
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Saffella Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Yay! thank you so much :hug:
Of course! I will send you a message with link to it when it will be finished :)
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WysokiNiski Featured By Owner Dec 7, 2012  Professional Photographer
I like it!
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Negative-Pallor Featured By Owner Nov 7, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
The closest to a critique I can give is just to say that I think you look better than the other models you often present here, you are so beautiful Laura!
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LauraCallsen Featured By Owner Nov 7, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
I think it's just easier for me to capture the emotions I want, when I take self-portraits. I don't have to explain what I want, which emotion I want to be revealed. And most models don't want dark pictures like this, but for now, that's what I want to do and what I need to do for myself =)
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c41atomica Featured By Owner Nov 6, 2012
the soft focus combined with the diffuse, shallow depth of field is amazing and it reminds me of the glamor and intrigue of hollywood cinema from the 40s - like those great love stories filled with passion and longing that were so delicately presented. this has the same candor in depicting the class, charm and elegance of women that those movies had. this is definitely an image of substance that stays with the viewer long after seeing it.
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diegotiziani Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2012
excellent!
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Aziraal Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2012
japp das hat was :)
sowas würde ich gerne mal mit röntgenfilm machen und dann mit schön viel kratzer das es superalt aussieht :heart:
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LauraCallsen Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
das hört sich toll an =D ich steh sowieso auf diesen zerkratzen alten look =) der ist auch nur schwer am pc nach zu ahmen finde ich =)
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Aziraal Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2012
:D siehste ich mache das mit echten film ohne pc :D
werf mal nen blick in meine galler , die letzten beiden fodos ;)
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